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__Comments__ Val G There is a lot of information here, Sean. You will need to condense and use less text.

I'm really impressed with your work. Nice job.

Rebecca Q Very nice presentation.

Am I supposed to be hearing any sound? Because I'm not... :)

If you can record your voice over the slides, that will lessen the need for text. Otherwise, I think the text is necessary for the presentation to stand alone.

Jamie A -Number Slides Can’t do without erasing every slide and recording all of my comments again Slide 2 Jamie A -Make slides explaining what STM is

Slide 4 Aprell C I'm not sure where on the graph you turned laser on or off. (I ask this because you said sample keeps expanding when the laser is off).

Jamie A Insert a clearer image Some reason my computer is messing it up. It looks clear on my powerpoint but changes when I upload it Slide 5 Jessica M For last bullet point - could just say: "Before and after images of each sample were taken to assess... changed Aprell C This slide has a lot of text. Maybe can use simpler phrases and take out the "I" first person voice. Instead of saying "I have been attempting"...write "Confirm caculated results with ...." I also don't hear sound on this slide. Adressed this problem Slide 7 Jessica M Perhaps some short figure descriptions here

Aprell C Some short labels by your 3 images would be good here. Recorded Comment added for each of the figures Slide 8 Jamie A It might be helpful to add labels so people know how to connect this image to the list on the previous slide. the picture I have you can't actually see all of the things I listed in the previous slide Aprell C No sound here or previous slide. But it is always good to have some figure "titles" or short description on an image. You could make this image smaller (1/3 smaller?)..and maybe list some "essential"equipment on the left or right space of the photo. This may lead you to delete the previous slide that has a really long list and a lot of text. Working on this, some reason my picture looks like a checkerboard on my powerpoint…hmm Slide 9 Rebecca Q Some comments would be helpful on this slide. I see a picture of the oscilloscope. (bottom left)

What information do you recieve from the oscilloscope?

Aprell C You probably don't need to repeat the bottom right image that you had on previous slide. Image Deleted

Slide 10 Rebecca Q The gold surface is made of gold atoms. You should change the "molecules" to "atoms" in the second bullet point. Changed

Aprell C I would minimize some of the text in the last 2 points (that are in smaller font). I am not clear on your last point on the scanning. If the areas scanned before and after are not the same, how can you determine changes? Or is it that you have to wait to get the same areas in both scans? If the latter is the case, then is it necessary to mention this? (especailly if your data is based on having scans from the same areas)

Comment added Slide 11 Rebecca Q Is this supposed to be a clean Au(111) surface that was contaminated by octanethiol?

If it is octanethiol on the surface (which I suspect is the case), it's very interesting how the molecules have rearranged from the image on the left to the image on the right. Comment added to clarify

Val G Hey there, Sean.

Great pics. To be clear in the text, maybe say "...shot the surface with the laser (beam?), and then..."

Otherwise, it could be interpreted as an action (shot) happened to the laser...I hope I'm not making this too complicated. You have an important result which should stand out clearly.

Nice! Already recorded my comment and changing the slide would require me to record again Aprell C what are "junk molecules"? Added Comment

Slide 12 Aprell C In your last point, you say the results are inconclusive. Is this because you have a large amount of variability in your results? You may not have to give this last point in "writing on slide." Just write out your two major findings (first two points), and then you can speak to the audience that results are inconclusive, procedure changes, etc. Answered, but my microphone sound quality is poor

Slide 13 Aprell C I would just expect to see 2 photos rather. Maybe give short labels on the timing (???) of the 3 images, so we can know which ones are before and after. Adressed in later slide

Slide 14 Jamie A Feature Does not need to be capitalized Fixed Slide 16 Rebecca Q I really like how you pointed out the differences in the images. It would be helpful to throw another slide in here with all of the images side by side, but with the changes circled. Slide with times and three images side by side inserted

Slide 17 Aprell C Add more descriptive title

Slide 18 Jamie A The first sentence needs to be revised, I think you're missing a verb. Sentence Revised and bullet points shortened. Sound inserted.

Slide 19 Jessica M Last few slides show a lot of good thinking on the topic - but need to have a bit less text

Aprell C I agree that there is a lot of text. Think about the main points/words you want people to read, and then think about what you can emphasize or introduce in the speaking part. You don't have to write out everything, just notes for people to follow along. But your figures/images should be clearly labeled. A lot of slides did not have sound/voice, but maybe that is a technicality on my part (???), although I hear sound on other presentations. made less text and recorded comments